MaxAnstey Posted January 14, 2009 Author Share Posted January 14, 2009 I made a sonnet for this girl i like so much and she recently said no, i think im in love with this girl and im 13: here we go….Nicole i love you please believe its trueim writing this sonnet, this ones for youmy loe for you is far far to greatyou said no when i asked for a datewhen i see you im overwhelmed with joyim more than a kid, more than a boyi know theres better, much better than menicole, if you want, please be my wifeyafter you've read this, if the answers still nothen il understand and il leave you alonethis is it now, ive said what i wanti dont even care if people laugh pick and taunt.it might not have 10 syllables each line im not sure.please vote and post a reply. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonFire Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 Nice one hope she says yes good luck man… Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MaxAnstey Posted January 14, 2009 Author Share Posted January 14, 2009 cheers and she only said aww. and shes said no before :/hopefully yes this time (: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Smallbro Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 Awwwww Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zade_o Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 Lol, not gonna lie, you can tell that you're a young teenager by reading it.However, for a young person that is a sweet sentiment I would say.Hopefully she won't turn you down this round =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tribal Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 If i went up to a girl i know and said that she would think i was a complete geek.Save yourself the heartbreak and ask her to the movies.Take my advice… don't tell her you 'love' her until you've been going out for like 2 weeks, or she says it first. And you must be at the pashing stage then! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MaxAnstey Posted January 14, 2009 Author Share Posted January 14, 2009 yeah i tried to keep in teeny. not adult poetry. shows that i am (i think) mature, but not too mature. and cheers. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MaxAnstey Posted January 14, 2009 Author Share Posted January 14, 2009 naah marsh. she knows i really like her and i didnt tell her, i sent her it, i was gonna give her a card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sowtis Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 Lol…No comment really...I aint voting cause none of the options are my response...Its just ... Lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MaxAnstey Posted January 14, 2009 Author Share Posted January 14, 2009 Lol? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devogen Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 i cant vote, my option of Vomit does not exist up top. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rithy58 Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 I never write a poem or something like that to a girl I like. I usually ask her if she want to go to the movie with me then I'll ask her there.Telling her through a letter or card isn't a good idea. You should tell her in person. But for me I kinda change my mind after I went out with girl for like 3-6 months. Don't know why. But now I found someone that I love very much. I'm going to stay with her probably forever. I started to like her for like a year and now she finally told me she kinda like me. Then I told her I like her, too. And now we're together.Sincerely,Rithy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MaxAnstey Posted January 14, 2009 Author Share Posted January 14, 2009 naah i said i liked her and she said no and that she doesnt believe i like her - long story.and iv asked her if she wants to meet up this wkd. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zade_o Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 yeah, the whole poem idea may come on kinda strong and or weird to a young girl especially when you're not actually together.I never wrote a poem for a girl until now, after we were together for a few months. Just passed a year now and we're doing good and we definitely love one another sooo… maybe that's a sign not to do poems that early? lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rithy58 Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 @MaxAnstey:> naah i said i liked her and she said no and that she doesnt believe i like her - long story.> and iv asked her if she wants to meet up this wkd.What? She doesn't believe you like her? Don't you like talk to her and stuff? Me, I usually do stuff with her to show her that I like her. Like last week we were talking about Cells and we have to work in pair, I went and pair up with her and do the project with her.Oh and what did she say about meet up this weekend?Sincerely,Rithy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MaxAnstey Posted January 14, 2009 Author Share Posted January 14, 2009 she said yeah :) and i do, like i said, its a long story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rithy58 Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 So this is a good sign and a good start.Sincerely,Rithy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MaxAnstey Posted January 14, 2009 Author Share Posted January 14, 2009 yeeah (: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rithy58 Posted January 14, 2009 Share Posted January 14, 2009 Well good luck then. You should try and see if she like you or not. Like how she act and stuff.Sincerely,Rithy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Techno 5.0 Posted January 15, 2009 Share Posted January 15, 2009 dude it seems like ur comin on a lil to strong therethat could be kinda creepy u kno Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Falnax Posted January 15, 2009 Share Posted January 15, 2009 @MaxAnstey:> I made a **sonnet** for this girl i like so muchSonnets have fourteen lines, while the poem you made only has twelve…so if she's a poetry lover, she might find that a little suspicious.Anyway, I love the concept of giving girls poems, I think it's really charming and romantic, but, I've talked to a number of girls on the subject, and most have told me that they found the fact that someone wrote a poem about them to be kind of creepy. Though, the few that enjoyed getting a poem were really impressed...so, you're going to have to play the odds. If you know Nicole as well as I hope you do, you should know how she feels about poetry. If it's something she never talks about, she probably wouldn't like a poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XxArchAngelxX Posted January 15, 2009 Share Posted January 15, 2009 its good i hope it helps,you should also look at other forms of poetry (to help later on)If you look look at other forms (for this sort of situation) try Terza RimaInfo from: [http://home.vicnet.net.au/~poems/ps/html/terza_rima.html](http://home.vicnet.net.au/%7Epoems/ps/html/terza_rima.html)Terza rima is a verse form composed of iambic tercets (three-line groupings). The rhyme scheme for this form of poetry is "aba bcb cdc, etc." The second line of each tercet sets the rhyme for the following tercet, and thus supplying the verse with a common thread, a way to link the stanzas. The only time the form changes is at the conclusion of the poem, where a single line that rhymes with the second line of the final tercet stands alone; the rhyme scene at the end of the poem looks like this: "xyx yzy z."example:Ode to the West WindBy Percy Bysshe ShelleyO wild West Wind, thou breath of Autumn's being,Thou, from whose unseen presence the leaves deadAre driven, like ghosts from an enchanter fleeing,Yellow, and black, and pale, and hectic red,Pestilence-stricken multitudes: O thou,Who chariotest to their dark wintery bedThe winged seeds, where they lie cold and low,Each like a corpse within its grave, untilThine azure sister of the Spring shall blowHer clarion o'er the dreaming earth, and fill(Driving sweet buds like flocks to feed in air)With living hues and odours plain and hill:Wild Spirit, which art moving everywhere;Destroyer and preserver; hear, oh, hear! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Falnax Posted January 15, 2009 Share Posted January 15, 2009 http://home.vicnet.net.au/~poems/ps/html/terza_rima.htmlPlagiarism fail.(On XxArchAngelxX, not on the OP). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devogen Posted January 15, 2009 Share Posted January 15, 2009 Taunt and Want dont rhyme, OP. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XxArchAngelxX Posted January 15, 2009 Share Posted January 15, 2009 lol i was going to post link forgot i will add now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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