rairai5650 Posted December 13, 2013 Author Share Posted December 13, 2013 ![](http://www.weebly.com/weebly/uploads/2/0/3/9/20395123/1387333873.png)> W.I.P. (WORK IN PROGRESS)Hello My name is Ryan and today i will gonna introduce my new game call Raven PH this is underconstruction i was using the 4.0 silver because i dont have any money and i'm not programmer so this work fine for me so know i will introduce it to all of you first we are going to the storylineStoryline >! There once was a peaceful independent city that watched over all humankind. Spiral was the home of heroes and was renowned for being the most romantic city in the entire realm. In addition, the people of Spiral were natural born leaders, men of action, and above all else encouraged justice. Since the Spiral's inception, the city has remained a hub of trade and the driving life force of the area. That all changed one day…>! Humanoid creatures and beasts from an unknown origin emerged from the depths of the earth with forbidden technology. They called themselves The Crimson Dragon Army, and they came with a single purpose: conquer Spiral.The good people of Spiral fought valiantly; however, the dark magic of the monsters prevailed.>! From within the city the Dragon Highlord brought to the lands an age of utter darkness. The glory of the once shimmering city began to dwindle. Hope was lost and the people cried out for a hero.>! You are one such hero. Can you rise to save the world or will it fall to utter ruin?Classes >! Warrior - Warrior are Close combat fighter who like to be in a thick of battle Encased in heavy armour they are protected from the strongest physical blows.They are good at dealing damage while protecting their team and have a strong resistance to phsycal damage but low defense against magic power>! Mage - Mage are highly intellegent with a natural affinity for controlling their elements.A crackling ice storm or a raging wall of fire on the battlefield is a sure sign a Mage is nearby .They have low health and physical defense but make up for it with their ability to inflict huge damage>! Priest - Priest are blessed with the ability to control light and darkness.While their are widely known for their powerful heals and buff they also have command of dark magic which can make them fierce adversaries.They are good fighting alone>! Features >! Epic QuestLvl Up until lvl 120PetFishing,trees and miningDungeon and instancesbuying hairstyle>! EnchantingAnd many more>! Screen Shots >! Contructive Critism pls dont say anything bad maybe i will change in the future but thats all for now GUI Main Menu >! ![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/584x454q90/854/lyzj.png)>! The Map is under develop i just screen shot it there is no npc yet in there >! ![](http://www.weebly.com/uploads/2/0/3/9/20395123/5294209_orig.png)>! ![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/807x675q50/843/6nk1.png)![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/808x672q50/42/9z3n.png)>! ![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/554x454q90/13/a7qd.png)![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/549x454q90/716/54bh.png)![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/549x454q90/547/pkq0.png)![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/546x454q90/690/4tx4.png)![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/546x454q90/20/pepf.png)![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/816x671q50/542/cz5w.png)![](https://imagizer.imageshack.us/v2/547x454q90/196/4rfi.png)Team >! Current StaffRyan - OwnerRon - Co - Owner>! Developer- Rohan and Ron>! Mapper - Ryan>! Graphic Artist - Ryan>! Web developer - Rohan>! Credits >! Eclipse Community - Eclipse OriginsAgoraphobic - Story Writter >! Forum and website>! >! the website and forum is under construct>! Download>! >! Coming Soon :( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dr.House Posted December 13, 2013 Share Posted December 13, 2013 The story makes no sense.The mapping, I'm sorry is very bad, feels very empty and dull.Try adding more stuff on the map, and put some windows on those buildings.Good luck with your project. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vus Posted December 13, 2013 Share Posted December 13, 2013 I appreciate your enthusiasm, but I think you should work on your game more.Storyline is, sorry, but terrible and also its just one long sentence.Also for: "(Please Dont Say My mapping is Bad :(()", I'm sorrry, but your mapping really isnt very good and you should work on it more. For start try adding some plants and other things to make it less empty, also you can use a bit of randomness.Accepting criticism is part of life you cant avoid. Anywyas, good luck with your game :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Growlith1223 Posted December 13, 2013 Share Posted December 13, 2013 * You're GUI is made of of 2 different GUIs that don't even match* You're mapping is, like everyone else has stated, is too empty. i think it's too linear and it's just built in cross-sections.* You're story line needs some rewriting* The classes are to generic, try adding something unique to each of them.That is all i have for now.Try working on the topic a little more, maybe some more screenshots and try and get a team going, having a team will split up the jobs into many so you don't have to do it all and you'll have more time to work on the site, this topic, etc. There are countless programmers on here, granted they charge, that do a wonderful job. a graphics artist is a must if you're wanting to make a game with your own team's content. same with music.Sincerely,Growlith1223 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 13, 2013 Author Share Posted December 13, 2013 I already expected this that is why i make it WIP but thanks for saying that i appriciate you i will rewrite the story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 14, 2013 Author Share Posted December 14, 2013 story has been edit thanks to agorapobic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moronsnail Posted December 15, 2013 Share Posted December 15, 2013 nice :> go PH !!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 15, 2013 Author Share Posted December 15, 2013 > nice :> go PH !!!Wahahaha pinoy tayo xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 19, 2013 Author Share Posted December 19, 2013 GUI has been edited by finding it long long years xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sealbreaker Posted December 19, 2013 Share Posted December 19, 2013 I guess everything has been said, except that your feature-list is also a bit funny.> Epic Quest = no feature> Lvl Up until lvl 120 = no feature> Pet = a feature!> More Maps = no feature> Fishing,trees and mining = features!> Dungeon and instances = features!> buying hairstyle = nothing worth mentioning> > Enchanting = a feature!> And many more = like… walking, fighting, monsters?I think you should work out your project alot more and try to understand what makes YOUR game special (or may make it special).Good luck.-seal Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 19, 2013 Author Share Posted December 19, 2013 Lol you are the one whos funny i did not wrote walking fighting lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sealbreaker Posted December 19, 2013 Share Posted December 19, 2013 I was joking… Because "And many more" is basically what everyone writes who doesn't know what else is a special feature in his game and thinks that the list is too short.Just wanted to point out that your feature-list basically only contains around 50% features. Didn't want to insult you or anything, but like everyone else here I try to guide you into the right direction. I had some eclipse projects and I've seen alot of them and as it stand now: Noone would want to play this (With noone I mean a maximum of 6 players online at any given time). But I think I already told you most of that in your first WIP-Topic.-sealEdit: Btw, the reason why I appear to be so "harsh" is that you don't seem to listen to people giving you constructive criticism. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kibbelz Posted December 19, 2013 Share Posted December 19, 2013 As harsh as it is, sealbreaker is right. The project looks alright though, you need more in-game map screenshots. (Also your current one is down).Out of interest, why do you seem to like all of your own posts on this topic?-Kibbelz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 20, 2013 Author Share Posted December 20, 2013 > As harsh as it is, sealbreaker is right. The project looks alright though, you need more in-game map screenshots. (Also your current one is down).> > Out of interest, why do you seem to like all of your own posts on this topic?> > -KibbelzNothing i just want to waste mu time by clicking xDBtw i just change my tileset Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Orbegon Posted December 20, 2013 Share Posted December 20, 2013 Keep it up the good work and make sure that your topic is functioning. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 20, 2013 Author Share Posted December 20, 2013 > Keep it up the good work and make sure that your topic is functioning.Thanks…. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Orbegon Posted December 20, 2013 Share Posted December 20, 2013 Your welcome. :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 20, 2013 Author Share Posted December 20, 2013 BTW i just change my tileset so i will start again xD it just because they are smothly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Orbegon Posted December 20, 2013 Share Posted December 20, 2013 Cool. Maybe you can give us a preview of them! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 20, 2013 Author Share Posted December 20, 2013 > Cool. Maybe you can give us a preview of them!Maybe later or tomorrow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Orbegon Posted December 20, 2013 Share Posted December 20, 2013 > Maybe later or tomorrowThat would be good. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 20, 2013 Author Share Posted December 20, 2013 > That would be good. ;)I already made it see it on main topic :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Orbegon Posted December 20, 2013 Share Posted December 20, 2013 Oh lolYAY new tiles! Looks way better than the original! I love them! :P Keep up the good work and keep updating! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rairai5650 Posted December 20, 2013 Author Share Posted December 20, 2013 ok then thanks for saying that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Orbegon Posted December 20, 2013 Share Posted December 20, 2013 Your welcome. Just really happy all the time! :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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