Please read if boring, stupid, good or not!!!

[fancyMEl]

Chaos Landia Legend

There once was a child who dreamed to be a warrior, everyday the words of his father who was also a soldier of the great empire at that times always echoes at his thoughts, he said "my son, today I will be in the front lines, if ever that I don't come back, you will have to go to your uncle, tell him what has happened and he will let you stay, take care of your self,.." from then on the boy until he grew trained as a warrior to defend his town, his loved ones and to become a warrior. He has forgotten his last childish act and acted as a responsible person at a young age, and alas, his hardwork payed off, he was accepted to be a soldier for the empire, there he had a friend that looked at his back when they went to war,… this friend of him likes to travel alot, so one time after their shift at the castle, they both ventured to the dark woods, there they fought countless hordes of evil creatures, but then they reached their goal,.. the vampire king's lair,.. where they have been held captive for countless days,.. then one day, the door of the cellar opened, it was an orc guard.. he took the his friend out of the cellar shouting,... and saw the shadow of the orc outside the door hitting his friend very violently,.. the warrior could'nt do anything to help his friend,.. every scream every groan,... he feels it,.. there at that time he swore to avenge his friend to kill every evil that has scattered and created, and foremost,... to kill the vampire king!!!

He slaughtered every and each one of those vile creatures of the night,... until he was summoned by a skeleton in an undead horse to go to the vampire king's castle,... he went there and a cage suddenly fell ad surrounded him in an instant,.. the cage seemingly looked like an arena,.. there he had to face the most horrifying act that is known,... the vampire king himself ressurected the corpse of his friend and brain-washed to fight him,.. after doing that,... the warrior felt hate in its most concentrated form,... he was released to fight the vampire king,.. but the king was to much to be destroyed,..  so he used the ways of the light to take the vampire king's spirit and infused it with his sword... then the warrior fatally wounded from the fight fell from his knees and and lied on the ground dying happy and smiling,... he murmured "I have accomplished my purpose on this world, I have freed my friend,.. and I have freed my land,.. and surely made my father proud,... MY FATHER!!!,.. I WILL BE WITH YOU!!!" then after saying those words,.. he passed out,... until now, his spirit fights side by side with every warrior who has of pure heart and mind,.. making his will theirs and keeping them spiritually fit,.. as the story goes,.. no one would ever equal the greatness of the warrior who has sacrificed his life for everyone,... for his friend, and for his land CHAOS LANDIA!!!!

                          This will be my story line for my new game!!! The title is Chaos Landia!!! please comment on it!!! ^^

[Techno 5.0]

i giv it a 7.5/10
it doesnt seem much of a storyline for a game tho…
my like game history or legends er sumtin like that
sumthin u can read in a library

[fancyMEl]

um,..ok, but this was not my idea,… it was my bf's idea,.. he helps me make my game,,

[Sylexus44]

Meh, i'd give it a 7.5 too, it's too shallow for an MMO storyline, but overall it's well written and credit deserving

[fancyMEl]

tnx ;D

[DrNova]

Please refrain from attempts to lick elbows, for your own saftey.

And sounds pretty good :)

Welcome to Eclipse btw

[Sylexus44]

@DrNova:

> Please refrain from attempts to lick elbows, for your own saftey.
>
> And sounds pretty good :)
>
> Welcome to Eclipse btw

Silly nova, elbow licking is physically impossible for an average human