How's My Game Concept?

[da beast]

Well I'm starting up a game finally. I don't really feel all to comfortable with the story as is currently yet but I'd like to hear what you guys think so I know what to tweak or if I should just trash the whole thing. The games called "White Omens"

Here it goes:

For 80 years 2 kingdoms have been waging a bloody war, The economic superpower kingdom of Pan has recently gained the uper hand in the war by turning former allies of thier enemy, The magical empire of Rite, to thier cause with the use of diplomacy and bribery. Furthermore the empire of Rite has began to run out of money for thier expensive magical rituals.

In a desprete attempt to turn the war back to their favor Rite unlocks the dark scrolls that rest deep below the royal estate. With the Pan elite strike team approaching the royal parties mansion they hurry the ritual, in the last moments something goes wrong…

The entire Rite empire is enveloped in a dark energy that faded after a few days. The entire landscape was transformed into a barren wasteland filled with monstrosities and horros. It appears everyone in the rite empire (along with most of the people on the Rite-Pan border) were killed in the initial explosion though there have been rumors of survivors hiding from the horros... It's your job as an adventurer to save these people, or perhaps you'll take a more unsavory line of work and loot the houses.

Tell me what you think!